Position your message in the reader’s best interest
Too often, communicators think the topic is the topic. But the topic is never the topic. The reader is always the topic.
Here’s how it works:
Before:
Again, the visual assets for the homepage are due on May 16.
Assigning colleagues a task? Make it go down easier by focusing on What’s In It For Me:
Make sure your homepage is pixel perfect. Please review it and have visual assets ready before it goes live on May 16.
Here’s another task for colleagues:
Please review the new name ideas for our transformation framework by EOW to ensure we collect customer feedback during next week’s focus groups.
Move colleagues to act by leading with the WIIFM:
To wrap up your transformation project on time, be sure to review the new name ideas posted in slack by EOW.
Before:
Want to know more about the Predictive Support solution?
Why would I? What’s in it for me?
You can now save time and money by predicting when your print/scan devices will fail with our predictive support solution.
Before:
XYZ’s coordinated addiction-care program can help you manage pain while ending your reliance on opioids.
You’ve got a good benefit there. Why bury it behind the name of your organization and your program? Focus on the WIIFM to readers:
Reduce your pain and end your reliance on opioids with XYZ’s coordinated addiction-care program.
Before:
The new XYZ integration is a smart, compelling solution for your business that will allow you to drive sales productivity and maximize your current technology stack.
Don’t bury the benefits behind an 8-word description of your product. Instead, lead with the WIIFM:
Streamline sales processes and get more value out of your investment with the new XYZ integration.
Before:
Using partners in deals is both beneficial to you and your customers.
Pro tip: “Benefit” is not a benefit. Focus on what I can do differently by partnering with customers:
Increase your quarterly sales up to three times and cut your customer’s project implementation time in half by using partners in your deals.
Before:
With our updated ABC, you can now measure each engagement and iterate based on actual data.
That sounds helpful. Why not lead with that WIIFM?
Close more deals and find out what’s working with our updated ABC. You can measure results down to the click.
Before:
You should take this survey because it will help our team help you close more deals.
Don’t lead with the task. Focus on how your ask will help me:
Get the tools you need to hit your sales goals. Let us know how we can help you with this survey.
Answer What’s In It For Me (WIIFM).
As a reader, which would you rather read: the befores or afters? About the product or service or about how the product or service will help you?
How can you reframe your message to focus on the reader instead of on your organization and its stuff?
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